I've decided that i'm going to write an original book. It isnt a Fan Fic like Night's so I'm putting it in the off-topic section. Anyway, right now im just focusing on all the background and bio stuff before I actually begin to write. So what I want from all my good friends on my favorite site (this one) is constructive criticism, suggestions, general ideas, etc...
Right now all the stuff I have is on my home system so the earliest I can get it up on here is tomorrow but I figured I'd make the Topic now so I wouldn't forget.
I've Decided To Write A Book
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Rammerrush
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I've Decided To Write A Book
Red: I've seen a 10-way.
Ram: That's how I met your mother, Red.
~Status~
Destuin= Dead
Dolor= Dead
CYOA= Dead
Furanda= Dead?
Ram: That's how I met your mother, Red.
~Status~
Destuin= Dead
Dolor= Dead
CYOA= Dead
Furanda= Dead?
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Redhollowlives999
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Re: I've Decided To Write A Book
Night had inspired everyone lol
I might write the dialog for my manga lol
It'll be good to work on lol
I might write the dialog for my manga lol
It'll be good to work on lol
it really do be like that tho
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Re: I've Decided To Write A Book
I'm sorry for a lack of updates. I've been crippled under way too much schoolwork... 
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Re: I've Decided To Write A Book
Hey I have the same problem, but I've come up with a brilliant solution. Ignoring it
Red: I've seen a 10-way.
Ram: That's how I met your mother, Red.
~Status~
Destuin= Dead
Dolor= Dead
CYOA= Dead
Furanda= Dead?
Ram: That's how I met your mother, Red.
~Status~
Destuin= Dead
Dolor= Dead
CYOA= Dead
Furanda= Dead?
Re: I've Decided To Write A Book
I have yet to start reading from ch2 yet. *sigh* I'll get to it when possible, sorry night.
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Re: I've Decided To Write A Book
So this is what I have so far. I'm ready for your critisism but be gentle it's my first time lol.
-Water Cells-
The cells that the Diathen Queen keeps all her prisoners in. In total there are aproximately ninety cells in her dungeoun. The cells are 6 by 10 feet, with a constant spray of water raining on the prisoners. The water begins scolding hot and steadily gets colder for an hour and then shoots back up to the maximum heat level. The drain in the middle of the cell drains the water and cycles it through the filtration system so it'll come back out clean.
-Aqua Dolls-
Living human dolls made by a mad man drawn to power. Most are created for one sole purpose or occupation,but they are also used as sleeper agents posing as humans waiting for their que to strike. The mad man who creates and controls them sometimes likes to create Dolls with implanted emotions just to mess with the heads of his enemies. How dark does one man have to be to enjoy the idea of creating a girl to get married and have kids only to her kill them against her will. To this day it is unknown Whether Aqua Dolls have any true emotions or if they are all implanted by their creator.
3 Main Characters
Faist Ramson- A noble turned guard arrested in his hometown of Diathen and stripped of his title 5 years ago.He overheard the leader of the rebelion talking about escaping the undersea city and scared that he might have heard too much his Queen sentenced him to life in jail for being a part of the very rebelion he had worked so hard to fight.
Orin Asrick- A slave born and raised in the caves under the Slaver city Sorreck. He's been fighting in the arena for 3 years trying to win his freedom, but his jailers keep cheating and stacking the odd against him. One year ago the slavers sent a group of trained vicious Blackwolves into the pen when only him and a handfull of others were left alive. Eventually Orin was the only contestant left alive. Luckily all but two of the Blackwolves were dead as well. Orin lunged at one of the wolves trying for a quick death, however a wolf had jumped for Orin at the same time. the wolf tore of his right arm and was gonna go for his throat when the arena boss called the trained wolves back in and laughed about how he needed one survivor to tell the horrible story. He got a mechanical mining arm to replace his lost appendage, of course he has added a few enhancements that other miners dont have. But even with his new arm, Orin hasn't participated in an arena since he lost his natural arm. His treatment in the caves his whole live has made him able to kill without a second thought and view law as nothing but a suggestion. He has no respect for authority and he thrives on conflict.
Liana Rain- An Aqua Doll created during a skirmish between them and a group of mages crossing into the mad man's territory. During the battle, the unit Liana was a part of slaughtered every single mage. However a few managed to escape the suprise attack and make it into the woods. Liana was assigned to track the escaped mages down and kill them. The first mage she found put up a fight but was no match for an Aqua Doll, but unexpectantly the mage still had enough energy to cast a spell on Liana before she died. Liana had no idea what the spell was so she dismissed it. However the spell is making her think and feel like a real living being.
#/Character/CHAPTER NAME/Description
01. (Faist) A Scared Queen: Faist is being dragged through a magestic hall to face his queen where he is reminded of his "crimes". Faist continues to deny any crimes he is charged with. The queen wont believe him and quickly grows tired of the site of him. She sends him back to his cell hoping a few more weeks in his cell will loosen his tounge.
02. (Orin) The Way Out: Starts in a pub in the Slave Caverns. A table surrounded by ruffians watching a card game between Orin and a muscular bone head. Orin wins and takes all his money. the bone head is a sore loser and threatens Orin outside the club for his money back. Orin unties the cloth over his right and to unveal his mining arm and shows him that one wrong move and all he has to do is rub the flint on his middle finger and pointer finger together to create a spark which would ignite all the powder on the bone heads body. He Runs off with his tail between his legs. Just then Orin sees a Slaver walk into the bar and he can over hear him announcing the final chance to enter the arena challenge. Hearing this Orin runs for the Arena
03. (Liana) Massacre: Liana forms slowly from the torrential downpour falling from the clouds overhead. She Looks around for the rest of her 5 man unit. once they are all formed they head in a straight line through a clearing. At the other side of the clearing behind a boulder lies a camp of mages, the Aqua Dolls don't know whether they know they're trespassing or not, but it doesnt matter to them. They rush in and quickly silence 3 sleeping mages. Unfortunately their screams wake the remaining 6 trespassers. The Dolls Rushed and hurriedly took out 2 mages, deflecting and dodging spells before finalling impaling each mage in multiple points. 3 run into the forest to try and escape their deaths. Liana is assigned the duty of tracking down the stragglers and killing them. She first finds a small female mage hiding behind a tree. Liana sneaks up behind and stabs the young mage straight through. Before Liana pull her arm out of the girl, the mage grabs on to her hand tightly and begins chanting. Liana was so startled that she just stood there amazed that anyone could have enough strength to cast a spell on the brink of death. the girl finished and fell lifeless off Liana's arm and onto the ground. Liana didnt feel any different, but she couldnt quite remember what the rest of her mission was, so she just decided to head back to her unit saying mission accomplished.
04. (Faist) Water Cell:
05. (Faist) An Escape Or A Trap:
06. (Orin) One Last Chance:
07. (Liana) What's A Soul?:
08. (Orin) I Call Bull 質:
09. (Faist) Beyond Known Borders:
10. (Liana) Assassination: The Do's And Don'ts:
11. (Orin) Blow It Up And Walk Away:
12. (Liana) Hit And Run:
13. (Faist) New World Encounters:
14. (Liana>Orin) Strange Compromise:
15. (Faist) Forgotten Quests, Remembered:
16. (Orin) Terrible Odds:
17. (Orin) Even Worse Odds:
18. (Faist) Awake:
19. (Liana) The Weird And The Confused:
20. (Faist) Happy Town:
21. (Liana) Shot In The Heart:
22. (Orin) This Town Ain't Big Enough:
23. (Orin>Faist) Interrogation:
24. (Liana) Betraying Your Life:
25. (Liana) Return To The Homestead:
26. (Orin) How To Kill Water:
27. (Faist) Fulfilling A Promise, And Other Unacheivable Goals:
28. (Liana) Soul Custody:
29. (Orin) Why Can't Water Be Flammable:
30. (Faist>Liana) Fight And Flight:
31. (Faist) Rebellion:
-Water Cells-
The cells that the Diathen Queen keeps all her prisoners in. In total there are aproximately ninety cells in her dungeoun. The cells are 6 by 10 feet, with a constant spray of water raining on the prisoners. The water begins scolding hot and steadily gets colder for an hour and then shoots back up to the maximum heat level. The drain in the middle of the cell drains the water and cycles it through the filtration system so it'll come back out clean.
-Aqua Dolls-
Living human dolls made by a mad man drawn to power. Most are created for one sole purpose or occupation,but they are also used as sleeper agents posing as humans waiting for their que to strike. The mad man who creates and controls them sometimes likes to create Dolls with implanted emotions just to mess with the heads of his enemies. How dark does one man have to be to enjoy the idea of creating a girl to get married and have kids only to her kill them against her will. To this day it is unknown Whether Aqua Dolls have any true emotions or if they are all implanted by their creator.
3 Main Characters
Faist Ramson- A noble turned guard arrested in his hometown of Diathen and stripped of his title 5 years ago.He overheard the leader of the rebelion talking about escaping the undersea city and scared that he might have heard too much his Queen sentenced him to life in jail for being a part of the very rebelion he had worked so hard to fight.
Orin Asrick- A slave born and raised in the caves under the Slaver city Sorreck. He's been fighting in the arena for 3 years trying to win his freedom, but his jailers keep cheating and stacking the odd against him. One year ago the slavers sent a group of trained vicious Blackwolves into the pen when only him and a handfull of others were left alive. Eventually Orin was the only contestant left alive. Luckily all but two of the Blackwolves were dead as well. Orin lunged at one of the wolves trying for a quick death, however a wolf had jumped for Orin at the same time. the wolf tore of his right arm and was gonna go for his throat when the arena boss called the trained wolves back in and laughed about how he needed one survivor to tell the horrible story. He got a mechanical mining arm to replace his lost appendage, of course he has added a few enhancements that other miners dont have. But even with his new arm, Orin hasn't participated in an arena since he lost his natural arm. His treatment in the caves his whole live has made him able to kill without a second thought and view law as nothing but a suggestion. He has no respect for authority and he thrives on conflict.
Liana Rain- An Aqua Doll created during a skirmish between them and a group of mages crossing into the mad man's territory. During the battle, the unit Liana was a part of slaughtered every single mage. However a few managed to escape the suprise attack and make it into the woods. Liana was assigned to track the escaped mages down and kill them. The first mage she found put up a fight but was no match for an Aqua Doll, but unexpectantly the mage still had enough energy to cast a spell on Liana before she died. Liana had no idea what the spell was so she dismissed it. However the spell is making her think and feel like a real living being.
#/Character/CHAPTER NAME/Description
01. (Faist) A Scared Queen: Faist is being dragged through a magestic hall to face his queen where he is reminded of his "crimes". Faist continues to deny any crimes he is charged with. The queen wont believe him and quickly grows tired of the site of him. She sends him back to his cell hoping a few more weeks in his cell will loosen his tounge.
02. (Orin) The Way Out: Starts in a pub in the Slave Caverns. A table surrounded by ruffians watching a card game between Orin and a muscular bone head. Orin wins and takes all his money. the bone head is a sore loser and threatens Orin outside the club for his money back. Orin unties the cloth over his right and to unveal his mining arm and shows him that one wrong move and all he has to do is rub the flint on his middle finger and pointer finger together to create a spark which would ignite all the powder on the bone heads body. He Runs off with his tail between his legs. Just then Orin sees a Slaver walk into the bar and he can over hear him announcing the final chance to enter the arena challenge. Hearing this Orin runs for the Arena
03. (Liana) Massacre: Liana forms slowly from the torrential downpour falling from the clouds overhead. She Looks around for the rest of her 5 man unit. once they are all formed they head in a straight line through a clearing. At the other side of the clearing behind a boulder lies a camp of mages, the Aqua Dolls don't know whether they know they're trespassing or not, but it doesnt matter to them. They rush in and quickly silence 3 sleeping mages. Unfortunately their screams wake the remaining 6 trespassers. The Dolls Rushed and hurriedly took out 2 mages, deflecting and dodging spells before finalling impaling each mage in multiple points. 3 run into the forest to try and escape their deaths. Liana is assigned the duty of tracking down the stragglers and killing them. She first finds a small female mage hiding behind a tree. Liana sneaks up behind and stabs the young mage straight through. Before Liana pull her arm out of the girl, the mage grabs on to her hand tightly and begins chanting. Liana was so startled that she just stood there amazed that anyone could have enough strength to cast a spell on the brink of death. the girl finished and fell lifeless off Liana's arm and onto the ground. Liana didnt feel any different, but she couldnt quite remember what the rest of her mission was, so she just decided to head back to her unit saying mission accomplished.
04. (Faist) Water Cell:
05. (Faist) An Escape Or A Trap:
06. (Orin) One Last Chance:
07. (Liana) What's A Soul?:
08. (Orin) I Call Bull 質:
09. (Faist) Beyond Known Borders:
10. (Liana) Assassination: The Do's And Don'ts:
11. (Orin) Blow It Up And Walk Away:
12. (Liana) Hit And Run:
13. (Faist) New World Encounters:
14. (Liana>Orin) Strange Compromise:
15. (Faist) Forgotten Quests, Remembered:
16. (Orin) Terrible Odds:
17. (Orin) Even Worse Odds:
18. (Faist) Awake:
19. (Liana) The Weird And The Confused:
20. (Faist) Happy Town:
21. (Liana) Shot In The Heart:
22. (Orin) This Town Ain't Big Enough:
23. (Orin>Faist) Interrogation:
24. (Liana) Betraying Your Life:
25. (Liana) Return To The Homestead:
26. (Orin) How To Kill Water:
27. (Faist) Fulfilling A Promise, And Other Unacheivable Goals:
28. (Liana) Soul Custody:
29. (Orin) Why Can't Water Be Flammable:
30. (Faist>Liana) Fight And Flight:
31. (Faist) Rebellion:
Red: I've seen a 10-way.
Ram: That's how I met your mother, Red.
~Status~
Destuin= Dead
Dolor= Dead
CYOA= Dead
Furanda= Dead?
Ram: That's how I met your mother, Red.
~Status~
Destuin= Dead
Dolor= Dead
CYOA= Dead
Furanda= Dead?
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Redhollowlives999
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Re: I've Decided To Write A Book
so orin is me and dv huh?? lol good pair, he sounds super dangerous
it really do be like that tho
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Rammerrush
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Re: I've Decided To Write A Book
I've started Writing on the first chapter but I can't decide if it's good or not.
Red: I've seen a 10-way.
Ram: That's how I met your mother, Red.
~Status~
Destuin= Dead
Dolor= Dead
CYOA= Dead
Furanda= Dead?
Ram: That's how I met your mother, Red.
~Status~
Destuin= Dead
Dolor= Dead
CYOA= Dead
Furanda= Dead?
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Nightshade
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Re: I've Decided To Write A Book
And now that I've decided to actually get back to putting fingers to keyboard, I've updated for the first time in a month. 
Any progress on your end?
Any progress on your end?
Do not question yourself with the why or the how. I simply am, and that is all you need to know.